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Long after my flesh is dead and necrotic
he'll be sitting there, grinning demonic.
A visage everlasting, made of stone
sits on the roof, silent, alone
though evil he is, he gives me protection
from those worse than I in my search for perfection.

when you no longer flinch at the sight of atrocity
all that you do turns to simple hypocrisy

Since the lowest places in hell
are reserved for those who betray,
they'll have to start renovations
to make some more space.
We're all going down there,
burning as heretics,
except for my friend
that grinning demonic.
©2007-2010 ~Dukluss
:icondukluss:

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Inspired by the beauty of gargoyles on roofs and by an Against Me! Song.

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:iconnight-hawk77:
Not bad, nicley written with a good flow to it. Though generaly in poetry the first letter of each line is Capitalized...

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My Only Salvation...Lies In Damnation
:iconlaceteddi:
Technically, there is no "generally" in poetry, unless you're sticking to a certain template -- by template I mean haiku, sonnet, etc etc.

Besides, the poem's constructed of sentences, and he capitalized each sentence. It works.


I really, really love this one, Duk. I've never told you, but I do really love your poetry. :)

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Live fast, play hard, die laughing.
:iconnight-hawk77:
You are right, there isn't. But what I meant is you don't normaly see lower case. It's not liek it matters, or takes away from anything.

And thank you :)

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My Only Salvation...Lies In Damnation
:iconlaceteddi:
Hahaha... that's right. Lace argues grammar.

You see this? I got your back like a fat bitches shadow. ;)
HA!


...too bad neither of us is fat.

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Live fast, play hard, die laughing.
:icondukluss:
Grammar arguments about a poem are like arguing on the Internet...

oh...oops. =P
:iconlaceteddi:
Hahahah.... fuck you. ;)

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Live fast, play hard, die laughing.

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